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Old 11-07-2010, 10:45 PM   #1
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Voices

Stand still face forward and look
straight ahead looking back at you.
Are you surprised to see
that it is only the life of me you took?

If only you hear
when they call out to you.
Don't think now honey we've only just begun.
Stopping standing in front of everything we fear

They are your voices
in and out of your head.
They know exactly what you've done
and have made all the wrong choices.

Does this mean I am mistaken?
Could it be that you have changed?
Walking my way to take that hate bullet
No, my instincts will not be unshaken!

You are who you are
the one who has doomed us all.
Stand up and take a bow
I'm sure your intentions will take you far.

Now it's time to listen closely
as voices begin to ring once again
The hate bullet strikes
Now it is you that is lonely.

I was wrong to think so ill of you
Maybe in time you will think so, too.

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This is a story about misconceptions between two people. A man who exists both physically and metaphysically. The voices are the man: leading a woman to make all of the wrong choices.
The man does this because he is lonely. He also cannot accept responsibility for his actions. The man tries to exist vicariously through the woman, but cannot help but see his filthy self in the woman, hence his anger towards her.

The hate bullet is symbol for finally doing what is right: leaving the man for dead. If the woman takes the hate bullet, she leaves the man and forgets about him. For the man, the bullet is not so much a symbol as it is a literal bullet. The man will have finally accepted the fact he will not change.
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It's also very cliched, but at least it doesn't have sparkling vampires and teen angst, so I guess that's a small step above horrendously generic.
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