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Old 03-31-2011, 05:42 PM   #1
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Custom Robo Arena: Crossover

Hi, I'm the newest member of this fine site, so bear with me! And this is my first story on this site, and do please go easy on the criticism. This 'fic will take place after the events of CRA, after the Hero (I named him Alex in my copy of the game) completes the Grudge Match and joins the IPC. Also, this story will mostly be in the perspective of Alex.

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Hello, I am officer Alex Geary of the International Police Corps, and this story is no doubt gonna blow you the freak away! I remember as if it were yesterday that I took on the Grudge Match, the rite of passage into the IPC. I'm also the world champion of the Robo Cup, just to let you guys know, just like Eddy Trainer was before me, when I've defeated him and his powerful Lightning Sky Robo, Mistral. It all started when I was on an assignment to retrieve a stolen dimensional transport device from a group of criminal Commanders. I was assigned alongside Eddy, Billy, and some other officers for the task. Little did I know, that the stolen device would also be the start of me and Eddy's amazing adventures across the time-space continuum...I almost forgot, I recieved a Dark Commander Mark from a doppelganger. The first time I defeated him, he gave me and illegal Sassy Stunner named Majel and its Indigo parts set, along with the aforementioned Dark Commander Mark, which acts as a pass into the Underground, where you can fight Dark Commanders who use illegal parts, and you can even buy illegal Robos and parts. The doppelganger also told me his history. It all started with a robo-professor doing research into Holosseums, creating a holographic opponent battle program, and it surpassed all expectations to the point where it gained sentience. Sometime later, that holo-Commander accessed a computer and downloaded all the Commander data in the world. But most of all it's MY data that caught his interest, and he assumed a form looking like an evil version of me, and utilizing the illegal Shining Fighter Ray II Dark! The second time I defeated him, I was in the Underground, and he gave me his Ray II Dark and its default parts, before fading away into thin air...

so guys, how's this for an intro paragraph?

EDIT (4/1/11): I did some grammatical corrections

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As for your story it has potential. I would add a few more adjectives and verbs, though.
I was not trolling, and thanks for complimenting my story, and I forgive you Mike
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