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Old 06-12-2011, 12:30 AM   #1
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Teleroboxer: Past Meets Future

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In the 22nd Century, a technology known as telerobotics has been implemented for tasks unbearable to human beings, and the machines can mirror the movements of their operators. To increase public interest in the technology, telerobotics expert Dr. Edward Maki Jr. invented a sport called Teleroboxing, where two people would fight against one another using telerobotic boxing machines. The sport became a worldwide phenomenon, and an international Teleroboxing tournament has been established, to find the true champion of the world. There were all sorts of Teleroboxing robots that fought in the tournament, from the menacing Spokong, to the agile Prin, as well as the self-destructive Bomkun, and the stealthy Tukikage. One robot stood out above the others in that very tournament, weighing in at 4300Kg, standing at 3.85m tall, and boasting the rapid-fire "Machine-Gun Attack". His name is Harry, and against all odds, he and his operator, a young man named Alex Deerman, defeated the "Legendary Champ", Milky (a cat believe it or not), and his robot Bamsham, which also possesses the Machine-Gun Attack, and became the new champions of the world. One year after Alex and Harry became the champs, a proper World Teleroboxing Association (WTBA) has been established, with Dr. Edward Maki Jr. at its head. If you think the story ends here, then you're wrong. The story has truly begun, not with Title Defense, hard training, or Alex on a date with Prin's operator Cheri Freneal, it begins with an experimental time/space device...

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I know Teleroboxer is obscure, and you needn't have to tell me twice. Let me know of any grammatical mistakes I have in this, and I'll be sure to correct them.
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Old 06-12-2011, 12:32 AM   #2
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The story has truly begun
The moment I saw that pt of my peripheral vision, I decided to not even read.
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All things have to start with the prologue, right?
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Old 06-12-2011, 03:19 PM   #4
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Of course. Most stories start with a prologue.

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Old 06-12-2011, 03:20 PM   #5
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The Bible didn't start with a prologue..
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Old 06-12-2011, 05:42 PM   #6
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not necessarily

@ Alpha Dialga: thanks for agreeing
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why does everyone have retarded names except the main characters?
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Well, I looked into prologues and this is what I found in a wikiHow article titled "How to Write a Prologue for your Novel":

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Prologues are sometimes not appropriate for certain stories. It all depends on the first paragraph of your first chapter. Write the first paragraph. Does it sound like you're going on with the story too quickly? If that is the case, then your story probably does need a prologue.
I think I can kind of see where you were going with what you said in your prologue, but it feels a bit... "Iffy." I'm not going to judge anything yet, and I haven't seen much previous work, so I'll try to follow some of the story.
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well let me tell you something.

the robots in Teleroboxer are supposed to be named like that, also Harry's operator is whoever plays the game, and Alex Deerman is an OC I thought up for the story.
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Agreed. I mean, robots do have those kind of names. Just look at the transformers, gundum, and other things the robots are in.
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